She is afraid to lose those close to her. She does the
thing you aren’t supposed to do, fall in love and forgets about herself. She
thinks of him before herself, holding on to every thread. This needed to end,
there needed to be a new beginning, one where the main character was she and
only she.
Chapter One, the smell of summer couldn’t taste as sweet
as the start of a new beginning. The smell of new opportunities, new school,
and new faces.
The beginning to her new life was by beginning the
reinvention of herself. Being whoever she wanted to be, but who?
It was so easy for her to go back to her normal routine,
being the supporting character in her own novel, but life had a new meaning.
Her new life didn’t include excuses, grief, and
selfishness that weren’t caused by her own. Fear had to be thrown out,
unwelcomed in her life.
“Use it throw a football across the river, to throw a
fishing line out by her banks, to throw a life into her depths.”
Could loneliness and happiness work together in harmony?
All she wanted were answers. Answers that, Sine Nomine
had, “A different façade, one that is anything but welcoming, anything but
peaceful, a face that fills you with fear.”
She needed to face fear, welcome it with a firm handshake.
I enjoyed reading your second blog post. It was evident throughout the reading that the author was searching for independence and change; you supported these ideas well by using a variety of action words, bringing about a sense of DOING rather than THINKING. Not only did this style make it more engaging for the reader, but I also felt as though it was very appropriate for the genre of this short blog post.
ReplyDeleteThe layout of your blog is very nice as well. I think it is clean, well-organized, and slightly feminine. The black and white theme was also a good choice because it gives a strong sense of power and independence- something that the author strives for based upon my reading of your first and second post.
I would consider looking back at your post and focusing upon the verb agreement within your sentences. The beginning of the sentences seem fine, but then after the comma the tense shift becomes a bit confusing at times and hard to follow along as a reader. I understood what you were trying to say throughout this blog post, but I believe clarity and consistency among the entirety of the post would help with its flow.
Another thing that was a bit confusing to me as a reader was the background and choice of the first quote used, the connection between fear is the only thing I see prevalent to this quote. Maybe this is a quote you incorporated from another blog post? Either way, a citation and credit to the original writer would allow the reader to better fit this random quote.
On a final note, I was a bit confused about the author’s viewpoint on fear. The post goes from saying, “Fear had to be thrown out, unwelcomed in her life,” to… “She needed to face fear, welcome it with a firm handshake.” If the shift of ideas could be clarified that would help a great deal. Other than those things, great job….I really thought your blog and its theme were interesting and well thought out. I look forward to reading more.